Ok, here's another poem, do you like it? And I wrote this before under another name.?
I watch her as she sits on the edge of the dock.
Her ebony hair flowing down her back like an inky waterfall,
glistening in the moonlight.
Her silver dress,
shimmes like 1 million stars.
Her slim foot dips into the icy waters.
Creating black ripples,
like heavens touch,
in the midnight sky.
As dawn come sweetly,
she flees,
like a ghost,
into the wood.
I see her shimmering eyes,
that glisten like mica,
as a single ray from the sun reflects off of them,
making them gleam.
Someday I will meet her,
this Ebony Girl
and I will know her story,
the story of why she sits here,
night after night,
and fleas at the rays of the sun.
its not about anyone, but i's inspired by my friends grandpa's house in NY
Jammie, I think I'll take your advice.
You really are talented. I think I could read your peoms all day.
There are a couple of things to make this stronger.
"1 million" I would have said "a million"
Watch the typos too, like "shimmers."
And it should be "flees at the rays of the sun."
This is a personal choice, but I don't like heavy similes.
"like a million stars" "like heaven's touch" and "like a ghost" are all fine. They aren't too heavy.
"like an inky waterfall" is too much, to me. I guess the word "inky" sounds funny to me. I would be tempted to say,
"Her ebony hair flowing down her back, a cascade of ink,"
but that's just my taste, I'm sure.
Overall, as usual, quite nice. Very mysterious. It's like you're talking about the shadows themselves and the ancient fairies that we imagine in the dark. That I imagine. Maybe you really see them. 
Lucky!
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